@Hobo95 Hi, thank you for the nice feedback. Having worked as a domina in real life seems to help :) Working with Celestin on part 2. Will post some sketches soon.

@Tiao Jiao That is really exciting to hear. Will those be published on DoF? Do you have a social media account we can also follow?

@Hobo95 Hi! Thanks for the nice feedback and I am glad that you liked my first script for DoFantasy. In Part 2 they reappear briefly. They will have a dedicated intense chapter in the near future where they meet the Dresden Twins ;)

@Tiao Jiao That is really exciting. I hope that we get to see them all put in slutty latex outfits and intense bondage. I also hope Lian gets to have a screaming orgasm at some point. She gets wet from sadism but it would be cool to see a slave eat her out. Thank you for continuing this amazing series.

@Surrenderdorathy Critiques

The narrative could get over explained a lot. Sometimes there was to much txt on the panel. I don't need the textt to tell me when a character sends a txt message. I can see it with my eyes. Showing and not telling goes a long way. After awhile a lot of the textt was redundant. I could see what was happening or the characters speaking/thinking was context enough.

I was a little put out by how casually Lian was introduced in the story. No hype. No build up. She's just suddenly in the dungeon with Nisa. Lian is the star of the show. Don't shy away from putting her in the center.

I wish Nisa and Eere were put in something sexy at some point. Naked is fun especially for the training scenes but once the orgy starts put them in some tight latex outfits. Put the in a short skirt. Put their hair up in some pig or pony tails. Slut them up and bit.

Is Nisa still holding on to that shard of glass? It's been almost 3 days? She can't hide it in clothes for obvious reasons & her pussy and asshole are off the table. Seriously no one notices her clenched fist?


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Ahhhh!!! I'm so glad this it connected to ATOCS!!!! I can't wait to see what those characters have been up to. I'd love to see Lian and Chyou make love on top of Claus's beaten body.

@Surrenderdorathy Thanks for your feedback and thanks that you liked it. One Future Chapter is about the making of Lian, so there is a flashback in time. Stay tuned, it will all come together.

@Surrenderdorathy Thank you for your kind words and critiques.

@DoFantasy Of course. Thank you for hosting the best BDSM artist currently working.